Chapter 16 total rewrite (much better) now available

It’s 2:30am and I’ve just finished a longer, fuller, expanded rewrite of the chapter 16 that I posted earlier. It came out much better this time, I think, as is often the way with at least my rewrites.

One concern with the rewrite is that I had to leave out one crucial plot development that I was quite pleased about in the first version. Expect to see it next time I return to Dad’s POV. I have a scene with him and Future Bastard in the works, so I should be able to deal with that item there.

If you’re reading along, thank you!

If you’re looking for the chapter, it’s in the usual place on the website.

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